Author: kwade
Update of /cvs/docs/install-guide In directory cvs-int.fedora.redhat.com:/tmp/cvs-serv13203
Modified Files: fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml Log Message: Publication edit, mainly small edits made highly visible by not filling paragraphs, broken into individual commmits. Some notes about this review: this is mainly content -not- XML review, although the XML looks prit-near perfect, and I tried not to tweak the XML for the XML-sake; using 'Fedora' to discuss the 'Fedora Core' OS is a little colloquial, so I tried to catch it where I could, i.e., FED -> FC ... this is akin to 'docs' v. 'documentation'; please read and comment back directly to us author/editors -or- the mailing list.
Index: fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml =================================================================== RCS file: /cvs/docs/install-guide/fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml,v retrieving revision 1.11 retrieving revision 1.12 diff -u -r1.11 -r1.12 --- fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml 27 May 2005 22:15:15 -0000 1.11 +++ fedora-install-guide-firstboot-en.xml 9 Jun 2005 00:18:23 -0000 1.12 @@ -5,7 +5,7 @@
<para> The <application>Setup Agent</application> launches the first time - that you start a new &FED; system. Use <application>Setup + that you start a new &FC; system. Use <application>Setup Agent</application> to configure the system for use before you log in. </para> @@ -187,7 +187,7 @@
<para> If you enable the <guilabel>Enable NTP Broadcast</guilabel> - advanced option, &FED; will attempt to automatically locate time + advanced option, &FC; will attempt to automatically locate time servers on the network. </para>
@@ -322,7 +322,7 @@ </tip>
<para> - To configure &FED; to use network services for authentication or + To configure &FC; to use network services for authentication or user information, select <guibutton>Use Network Login...</guibutton>. <!-- Network authentication is explained in a separate tutorial. [Remove this comment when the @@ -364,22 +364,22 @@
<para> Click <guibutton>Play Test Sound</guibutton> to check the sound - card configuration. If the configuration is correct, &FED; plays + card configuration. If the configuration is correct, &FC; plays a sound sequence. If your sound card is identified, but you do not hear the sound, check your speakers and try again. </para>
<para> - You may manually configure a &FED; system to use unsupported sound + You may manually configure a &FC; system to use unsupported sound cards after the installation process is complete. Manual sound - hardware configuration, however, is beyond the scope of this + hardware configuration is beyond the scope of this document. </para>
<tip> <title>Changing the Sound Card</title> <para> - &FED; will automatically attempt to detect a new sound card if + &FC; will automatically attempt to detect a new sound card if you add one to your system. If you need to launch the detection process manually, from the main menu, choose <menuchoice> <guimenu>Desktop</guimenu> @@ -397,7 +397,7 @@
<para> This screen allows you to load prepared discs for installing - third-party software. You cannot use it, however, to install + third-party software. However, you cannot use it to install additional packages from the &FC; discs. </para>