Hi Ryan,
Looks good to me :)
Regards,
Sumit Bhardwaj
On Monday 15 June 2015 11:37 AM, Ryan Lerch wrote:
> On 06/15/2015 03:00 PM, Sumit Bhardwaj wrote:
>> Hi Ryan,
>>
>> Thanks for the great suggestions. The pleasure is all mine, Fedora
>> has brought so many positive changes in my world of computing, If I
>> can do anything for the project, it's an honor and a privilege.
>>
>> I have tried to incorporate your suggestions in the article and
>> resubmitted it for review. Please have a look and let me know if any
>> further refinement would be good.
>>
>> Thanks again.
>> Regards,
>> Sumit Bhardwaj
>> On Monday 15 June 2015 09:14 AM, Ryan Lerch wrote:
>>> Hi Sumit!
>>>
>>> First up, thanks for submitting your first post to the Fedora
>>> Magazine. I have done a quick review of your post, and here are a
>>> few ideas / suggestions from me. (other editors, feel free to pitch
>>> in ideas too)
>>>
>>> First up, i'd probably be a bit more direct and informative with
>>> the title, instead of "Fedora 22 Intel Graphics Woes : Here's some
>>> help"
>>> maybe something like "Solution for graphics issues on some Intel
>>> graphics chipsets in Fedora 22" (just a suggestion, feel free to
>>> change and or edit too :) )
>>>
>>> Secondly, i'd probably remove the majority of the first paragraph
>>> and lead with the issue itself (your third paragraph) -- most
>>> people get to the magazine via third party links, so starting with
>>> the info they came for always works well. I'm thinking something like:
>>> """
>>> Fedora 22 was [link to release annonce on fedora mag]released
>>> recently[/link], and if you are using a Pre-Sandybridge era
>>> Intel-based graphics chipset (For example, Intel 4 series
>>> motherboards with G41 chipset and GMA X4500 graphics), chances are
>>> that you might be facing graphics issues like shown in below
>>> screenshot on Fedora 22.
>>> [screenshot]
>>> """
>>>
>>> Then after the screenshot, have your brief description of the
>>> problem, covering the points that fedora switched to a new accel
>>> method that doesnt work so well with older chipsets.
>>>
>>> Then put the solution. I found the bug for this issue
>>> (
https://bugzilla.redhat.com/show_bug.cgi?id=1226743) which might
>>> be worth mentioning. And there updated kernels
>>> (kernel-4.0.5-300.fc22 and kernel-4.0.5-200.fc21) that fix this
>>> issue is already in updates-testing, so it is probably a better
>>> solution to recommend that people install the new package with the
>>> fix from updates testing, or wait for the package to hit the proper
>>> repos (rather than editing a config file that they may forget about
>>> and cause them issues in the future.)
>>>
>>> cheers,
>>> ryanlerch
>>>
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>>
> Just did a quick edit, and added a quick howto on getting the
> packages from updates-testing (in case the reader doesnt know how
> to), and added some emphasis on the note that the workaround is a
> temp solution.
>
> Does that look ok to you? feel free to revert if you don't agree :)
>
> cheers,
> ryanlerch
Looks good!
Can one of the other editors have a quick sanity check of the post this
morning (Monday morning USA time), and publish if it is ok sometime this
morning?
cheers,
ryanlerch