On 06/15/2015 04:19 PM, Sumit Bhardwaj wrote:
Hi Ryan,

Looks good to me :)
Regards,
Sumit Bhardwaj
On Monday 15 June 2015 11:37 AM, Ryan Lerch wrote:
On 06/15/2015 03:00 PM, Sumit Bhardwaj wrote:
Hi Ryan,

Thanks for the great suggestions. The pleasure is all mine, Fedora has brought so many positive changes in my world of computing, If I can do anything for the project, it's an honor and a privilege.

I have tried to incorporate your suggestions in the article and resubmitted it for review. Please have a look and let me know if any further refinement would be good.

Thanks again.
Regards,
Sumit Bhardwaj
On Monday 15 June 2015 09:14 AM, Ryan Lerch wrote:
Hi Sumit!

First up, thanks for submitting your first post to the Fedora Magazine. I have done a quick review of your post, and here are a few ideas / suggestions from me. (other editors, feel free to pitch in ideas too)

First up, i'd probably be a bit more direct and informative with the title, instead of  "Fedora 22 Intel Graphics Woes : Here's some help"
maybe something like "Solution for graphics issues on some Intel graphics chipsets in Fedora 22" (just a suggestion, feel free to change and or edit too :) )

Secondly, i'd probably remove the majority of the first paragraph and lead with the issue itself (your third paragraph) -- most people get to the magazine via third party links, so starting with the info they came for always works well. I'm thinking something like:
"""
Fedora 22 was [link to release annonce on fedora mag]released recently[/link], and if you are using a Pre-Sandybridge era Intel-based graphics chipset (For example, Intel 4 series motherboards with G41 chipset and GMA X4500 graphics), chances are that you might be facing graphics issues like shown in below screenshot on Fedora 22.
[screenshot]
"""

Then after the screenshot, have your brief description of the problem, covering the points that fedora switched to a new accel method that doesnt work so well with older chipsets.

Then put the solution. I found the bug for this issue (https://bugzilla.redhat.com/show_bug.cgi?id=1226743) which might be worth mentioning. And there updated kernels (kernel-4.0.5-300.fc22 and kernel-4.0.5-200.fc21) that fix this issue is already in updates-testing, so it is probably a better solution to recommend that people install the new package with the fix from updates testing, or wait for the package to hit the proper repos (rather than editing a config file that they may forget about and cause them issues in the future.)

cheers,
ryanlerch










Just did a quick edit, and added a quick howto on getting the packages from updates-testing (in case the reader doesnt know how to), and added some emphasis on the note that the workaround is a temp solution.

Does that look ok to you? feel free to revert if you don't agree :)

cheers,
ryanlerch

Looks good!

Can one of the other editors have a quick sanity check of the post this morning (Monday morning USA time), and publish if it is ok sometime this morning?

cheers,
ryanlerch