captions looks good :)
On Mon, Jun 15, 2015 at 10:44 AM, Ryan Lerch <rlerch(a)redhat.com> wrote:
Hi Sumit!
First up, thanks for submitting your first post to the Fedora Magazine. I
have done a quick review of your post, and here are a few ideas /
suggestions from me. (other editors, feel free to pitch in ideas too)
First up, i'd probably be a bit more direct and informative with the
title, instead of "Fedora 22 Intel Graphics Woes : Here's some help"
maybe something like "Solution for graphics issues on some Intel graphics
chipsets in Fedora 22" (just a suggestion, feel free to change and or edit
too :) )
Secondly, i'd probably remove the majority of the first paragraph and lead
with the issue itself (your third paragraph) -- most people get to the
magazine via third party links, so starting with the info they came for
always works well. I'm thinking something like:
"""
Fedora 22 was [link to release annonce on fedora mag]released
recently[/link], and if you are using a Pre-Sandybridge era Intel-based
graphics chipset (For example, Intel 4 series motherboards with G41 chipset
and GMA X4500 graphics), chances are that you might be facing graphics
issues like shown in below screenshot on Fedora 22.
[screenshot]
"""
Then after the screenshot, have your brief description of the problem,
covering the points that fedora switched to a new accel method that doesnt
work so well with older chipsets.
Then put the solution. I found the bug for this issue (
https://bugzilla.redhat.com/show_bug.cgi?id=1226743) which might be worth
mentioning. And there updated kernels (kernel-4.0.5-300.fc22 and
kernel-4.0.5-200.fc21) that fix this issue is already in updates-testing,
so it is probably a better solution to recommend that people install the
new package with the fix from updates testing, or wait for the package to
hit the proper repos (rather than editing a config file that they may
forget about and cause them issues in the future.)
cheers,
ryanlerch
<sumitkbhardwaj(a)gmail.com>
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