On Sat, May 30, 2009 at 2:07 AM, Max Spevack mspevack@redhat.com wrote:
On Fri, 29 May 2009, Eric Christensen wrote:
Thanks to Jack and Paul for stepping up and really getting the release announcement[1] built. We, at Docs, have reviewed the final draft and think we are in consensus that it is complete. Please look over it and see if anything jumps out at you. If not, this is what we'd like to go with.
I like it. It makes me smile, and not much does.
Minor suggestions:
(1) Change Dr. Brattlesworth to some sort of pun on a Fedora name? Unless Brattlesworth has some other meaning that I simply don't get.
Well Brattlesworth doesn't prattle anything so the other fellow must be Dr Broll who is very droll. I would believe Brattlesworth would be played by someone very quiet . Broll is of course played by Michael Palin (who does these sort of things for a living) and Brattlesworth would be played by a very quiet John Cleese who would mime being eaten/beaten/mauled by the Leonadis.
(2) I read "snares, toils, and dangers" as "snares, trolls, and dangers" at first, which might be funnier!
I think toils goes better with the general story. Trolls is more of Holy Grail skit.
(5) I believe people adjourn to the "parlour" for cigars and brandy, not the "sitting room". :)
Dear sirs,
in the matter of your speech, I believe I have found a slight problem. In most victorian and edwardian novels it would seem that the men go to the smoking room, the ladies go to either the parlour or sitting room. Seeing a man in the parlour was usually a sign of distress. Which of course would be how a skit like this would end.. the lights come on and we see that all the old gentlemen are dressed in drag. However that is a visual joke hard to accomplish in written word :0.