Thank you very much Dale!
I know my grammar is not very good, but I continue learning :)
Thanks for all the tips and explainations about my mistakes. I value them
the most and I'm learning a lot.
I will apply the changes to the document and after that I will probably cut
it in two parts. The setup and the usage.
Will come back with news! Thanks and cheers!
On Wed, Jun 27, 2018 at 3:23 AM Dale Raby <daleraby(a)gmail.com> wrote:
Hi Oliver,
I opened your .txt article in LibreOffice Writer, made notes for you in
red, the saved the altered document with a .odt filename extension. Mostly
it reads coherently and an English speaker might find some of the phrasing
a little unusual, but he would understand most of it. Even us Anglos don't
always agree on how to say some things.
All in all, its a well-written article.
On Tue, Jun 26, 2018 at 4:45 AM, Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com>
wrote:
> Thank you very much Dale. I'm fixing the whole things you pointed. Almost
> all of them make sense from the IT part. :)
>
> I will finish the modifications maybe today or tomorrown and I will
> change the document to a text document so you can review it better :)
>
> Thanks for your help and your time!
>
> On Sat, Jun 23, 2018 at 4:53 AM Dale Raby <daleraby(a)gmail.com> wrote:
>
>> Just put in some suggestions. Your English is better than my Spanish
>> but I found a few minor grammatical errors.
>>
>> The biggest problem I found was that there seems to be a large block of
>> text that is a duplication. The section with the graphics is difficult for
>> me to view with my slow connection here.
>>
>> Google documents are always difficult for me to edit. Google assumes
>> that everyone has very fast connections and modern machines. I have
>> neither. It put me into "suggestion mode", which is actually very
clever
>> of them... if only I had a fast connection!
>>
>> Bear in mind, that while I am a native speaker of English and have
>> actually done quite a bit of writing, I am NOT an IT expert. So.... take
>> any suggestions I give you with caution. I could be misunderstanding your
>> intent.
>>
>> I will look at this again tomorrow when I am not half asleep.
>> Neighbor's cattle (Herfords, two heifers, a calf and a 1,200 pound bull)
>> got out onto the road this evening. I and former US Congressman Alan Lasee
>> helped a police officer and the owner get them back into the enclosure.
>> Was quite enough excitement for me!
>>
>> Dale
>>
>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:14 PM, Oliver Gutierrez <ogutierrez(a)redhat.com
>> > wrote:
>>
>>> Thank you very much Mr Raby! Just give me the time to separate it in
>>> sections (so I will need to ad intros and outros for each block) and after
>>> that I will need a review.
>>>
>>> In the meantime, I will give you the access you required :)
>>>
>>> You just need to access the document in this URL
>>>
>>>
>>>
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_Lj3JptZ5m1...
>>>
>>> Then Google will allow you to ask for document access and I will
>>> receive a notification to give you the permissions.
>>>
>>> If you do that and you see I had not answered or allowed, please tell
>>> me because maybe the notification is lost in my inbox.
>>>
>>> Again thanks.
>>>
>>>
>>> P.D. Swear words in spanish are usually enough to be very communicative
>>> of your current mood :P
>>>
>>> P.D. 2: After trying to send this email again, google asked me to give
>>> automatic access to view the document to recipients, so maybe you will be
>>> able to see it after receiving this.
>>>
>>>
>>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 4:35 PM Dale Raby <daleraby(a)gmail.com> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Senor Gutierrez:
>>>>
>>>> I will be happy to look over your article(s) and address any linguistic
>>>> issues. I speak English quite well, German OK, but my Spanish is
>>>> limited
>>>> to swear words my Puerto Rican roommate taught me during my army days.
>>>>
>>>> I need permission to access your document though.
>>>>
>>>> Dale
>>>>
>>>> On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 6:50 AM, Oliver Gutierrez <
>>>> ogutierrez(a)redhat.com>
>>>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> > Yeah, I can do that. Just give me some time to do it and I can
>>>> separate
>>>> > them into more "atomic" pieces :)
>>>> >
>>>> > Thanks for reviewing!
>>>> >
>>>> >
>>>> > On Fri, Jun 22, 2018 at 2:16 AM Paul Frields
<stickster(a)gmail.com>
>>>> wrote:
>>>> >
>>>> > > On Thu, Jun 7, 2018 at 1:06 PM Oliver Gutierrez <
>>>> ogutierrez(a)redhat.com>
>>>> > > wrote:
>>>> > > >
>>>> > > > Hi there.
>>>> > > >
>>>> > > > Here it is the Fleet Commander draft article I promised to
Paul
>>>> for
>>>> > > review.
>>>> > > >
>>>> > > >
>>>> > >
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1VpQhEoTXUkrzTxxVLxLED3IkZL_
>>>> > Lj3JptZ5m1FMDRHU/edit?usp=sharing
>>>> > > >
>>>> > > > Please, tell me whatever change you want to enhance it and
as
>>>> English
>>>> > is
>>>> > > > not my mother language, any suggestion, correction etc. is
most
>>>> > welcome.
>>>> > >
>>>> > > Hi Oliver,
>>>> > >
>>>> > > There's a LOT of good material here! However, 13 pages is
just too
>>>> > > long for a Magazine article. (Although your document looks like
it
>>>> > > might duplicate material, and it might be 6.5 pages * 2.) Can
you
>>>> > > consider cutting this up into a couple articles? They could
run
>>>> like
>>>> > > this:
>>>> > >
>>>> > > * What is FC and how do you install it?
>>>> > > * Setting up a test environment and showing how to set up a
profile
>>>> > >
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