On Wed, Feb 18, 2009 at 1:31 PM, John Poelstra <poelstra@redhat.com> wrote:
Hi Docs People,

I'm wondering of there are any people who would be willing to do their word-smithing magic on the text for this page: https://fedoraproject.org/wiki/Releases/11/FeatureList

I made one quick pass a this from a general standpoint.
 

This page gets a lot of exposure and is read by a lot of different audiences, including the media. I'd like to make sure it is understandable and reads as well as it can.  The summary that accompanies each feature name is particularly important. For the most part the summary comes directly from the individual feature page.

I'll need to read a few of the feature pages before I can help more, but I see some candidates for updates :)

One recurring question:  Do the different audiences know what rebase is?
For example:
"Update Xfce to the upstream 4.6 release with many new improvements and features." seems like a good clip
but " Rebase to Gnome 2.26"  maybe not so much. 
I know that most of Fedora community should understand this description but what about the other audiences that you are targeting with this page?

-Susan
 

Thanks,
John

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